It looks great to me, Vinny. I can't think of anything worth adding---I wouldn't want to dilute the main message which you have communicated very effectively here. Thanks so much. tammy On Jun 10, 2011, at 6:34 PM, Vincent J. Hrovat wrote:
This is my first press release so fire away. I am not sure if the next to the last paragraph should stay in it. Also, I have seen people saying that we have over 600 birds in our system. A query showed me more like 400, so I used that. If someone can verify the 600 figure for me I will use it. Other than that I think that this is solid.
I do not have Kim’s words from last night so was unable to include them. I am thinking that the press release is long enough and that Kim’s words might be better on our blog and/or Facebook page. But if someone sends them to me and if we want to use them in this press release I will take a stab at it.
I would like to get this out by morning if possible. Once approved, it will take me a couple of minutes to post this in our public wiki and, subsequently, in our Reading Room. From there, Matt’s team can tweet and wall post on Twitter and Facebook and we can announce to discuss list, etc. And, of course, mail it to whichever media contacts we have like Gary Bogue and Eileen Mitchell.
Please let me know what you think; I will especially appreciate hearing from Tammy, Michelle and Pam. Thanks.
Vincent J. Hrovat