Thanks Michelle. The plural “adoptions” in the description of item 1 was taken verbatim from AWC’s minutes, but I removed the ‘s’ because it is an apparent typo. I made a few other minor changes to clarify or provide better word variety. See attached R2 document.

Elizabeth’s 250 should be included in the 400 count, assuming that they are entered into ASM with proper animal counts. However, I see that we again have a few dozen animals with zero counts, dating from 04/18 to a few days ago. Nowhere near 200 though. I would prefer to wait to hear Elizabeth’s and/or Matt’s thoughts about the count before changing it to 600.

Thanks.

--VH

From: media-advisors-bounces@mickaboo.org [mailto:media-advisors-bounces@mickaboo.org] On Behalf Of Michelle Yesney
Sent: Friday, June 10, 2011 8:19 PM
To: Vincent J. Hrovat
Cc: Mickaboo media advisor team; Lee,Pamela A
Subject: Re: [Media-advisors] Press release for SF ACW proposal (attached)

Vinny,

I'm not very experienced with press releases, but this seems to me to do a good job of communicating the whole picture without being unnecessarily long.  (The "s" on adoptions in item #1 is probably not needed.)

Since I think Elizabeth said that Coo had about 250 birds, that might be where the numbers are coming from.  I'll see if I can run down the sources.

Michelle

On Fri, Jun 10, 2011 at 6:34 PM, Vincent J. Hrovat <vinny@vhrovat.org> wrote:

This is my first press release so fire away. I am not sure if the next to the last paragraph should stay in it. Also, I have seen people saying that we have over 600 birds in our system. A query showed me more like 400, so I used that. If someone can verify the 600 figure for me I will use it. Other than that I think that this is solid.

I do not have Kim’s words from last night so was unable to include them. I am thinking that the press release is long enough and that Kim’s words might be better on our blog and/or Facebook page. But if someone sends them to me and if we want to use them in this press release I will take a stab at it.

I would like to get this out by morning if possible. Once approved, it will take me a couple of minutes to post this in our public wiki and, subsequently, in our Reading Room. From there, Matt’s team can tweet and wall post on Twitter and Facebook and we can announce to discuss list, etc. And, of course, mail it to whichever media contacts we have like Gary Bogue and Eileen Mitchell.

Please let me know what you think; I will especially appreciate hearing from Tammy, Michelle and Pam.  Thanks.

Vincent J. Hrovat