Hi,
This topic was brought up in discuss list and I am bringing it over here for
focus. With all due respect to the person who was concerned that people will
think that we are going out of business when they read the notice about our
moratorium, I cannot imagine how any literate and rational person who reads
that could infer that we are going out of business. The notice talks about
our desire for long term success. It says that we are "temporarily
suspending intake" and "not closing our doors forever" and that we are
focused on building infrastructure. It talks about all of the birds that we
currently have in our system.
In fact, I think that the current version is pretty good and that, if we
specifically said that we are NOT going out of business, it would cause more
concern! It's possible that a few people misread it or misunderstood it, and
perhaps adding a few more points for emphasis would help. Of course, if
people don't read it or are just not all there we can only do so much about
it!
On that basis, I am recommending some nuanced changes, mostly additions to
the current version; please see attached. In the recommended version I add a
sentence about how many birds we have and say that we continue to care for
them. I also added a few sentences about our "doing our best" to triage in
the most needy birds, and added a plug for donations at the end. Word count
on the proposed version is 346 compared to 196 for the original, which might
be a concern.
Please review and let me know what you think.
Thanks.
Vincent J. Hrovat
